thoughts scatter
in every direction -
fog settles
____________
low pressure clouds
humid air weighs heavily -
office dust swirls
Tuesday, June 12, 2007
Office Doldrums
My very first attempts at haiku - thanks to Crafty Green Poet for helping me get started, and to One Deep Breath which celebrates its first birthday with a free theme this week!
thoughts scatter
in every direction -
fog settles
____________
low pressure clouds
humid air weighs heavily -
office dust swirls
thoughts scatter
in every direction -
fog settles
____________
low pressure clouds
humid air weighs heavily -
office dust swirls
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For the rest of life
I shall seek enlightenment
on the path I go
Brian - thanks for the haiku response... good thoughts.
Those are excellent, you've really captured the moments! Incredibly impressive for a first attempt! I look forward to reading more haiku from you!
CGP - thank you so much for the encouragement! I've got a few more in the works... :)
Welcome to the party Hanulf.
Welcome! Wonderful contribution I can really relate to. :)
Two good poems. Welcome!
Pearl - it's a great party :)
Tammy - glad you can relate... :P it's starting to come on again - I guess that's why I'm commenting here and not focusing on the task at hand! :/
Sandy - thanks, looking forward to playing again :)
these are really good!
..those were really nice. The first one express the chaos inside my mind. Welcome!
thoughts scatter
in every direction -
fog settles
Very nice haiku. I find myself ruminating over it ... it almost lifted my "brain fog." :-D
These are great, they really capture that fuddled office head feel I'm currently experiencing, yet they're also beautiful. I guess that's because you encapsulate the truth of it so well.
Your first is so easy to relate to. Yes, the fog does settle. And I love "office dust swirls." Happy first attempt! A brilliant job.
Michelle - thank you! :)
Unedited-life - yep... chaos is a good word for it! Thanks for the welcome :)
Roswila - glad i could help ;)
THFB - "fuddled office head feel" - very descriptive, hehe
Patois - thank you. Thank you very much. ;)
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